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Lying in bed, with the dark and the cold,
Fighting off the dreams passing through my mind
Seeing moon light upon the empty fold.

Remembering time past and days of old,
The passing since, to me, has not been kind;
Lying in bed, with the dark and the cold.

Many things said, many things yet untold,
Small and fleeting thoughts which prove to remind,
Seeing moon light upon the empty fold.

Your companionship valued more than gold,
But now, you are gone, and me, left behind
Lying in bed, with the dark and the cold.

Bitter feelings, in my heart, taking hold,
Yet fond memories become more refined
Seeing moon light upon the empty fold.

My soul filled with a great, yet controlled
Inner aching, foreign and undefined,
Lying in bed, with the dark and the cold,
Seeing moon light upon the empty fold.
©2009 ~Vaya-Kahvi
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Author's Comments

This has caused me to be annoyed with Erato, as I was up half the night last night with the start of the poem.

I hope you enjoy! :)

:iconcriticplz: are very welcome!

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:iconwiebestavast:
:wow: I'm impressed!
So, this is called a Villanelle?
:)I'll put this one in my next journal! Do you have another 1, you'd like to highlight?
:hug:

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;) Het beste halen uit wat je hebt. Da's pas kunst!
;)Getting the most out of what you got. That's true art!
:iconvaya-kahvi:
The other ones are "Do not..." and "Creature of the shadows" you get to pick which one you want to feature.

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"I'm against the self-righteous hateful agendas of mankind." - ~Mavyrk

"So the cause of death was the letter S?" Gil Grissom

"Don't judge a book by its movie." - ~CindarellaPop
:iconwiebestavast:
:)Ok, I'll see through them!

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;) Het beste halen uit wat je hebt. Da's pas kunst!
;)Getting the most out of what you got. That's true art!
:icononemanmafia08:
this would make a sick set of lyrics haha. Great job my friend, glad you won that contest, and also- I forget when you submitted this haha. Just shows how much accually slips my attention.

also I like how the middle lines ryhme and the begining and ending of each stanza (correct me if I'm wrong on what a stanza is haha) ryhmes differently :XD: I've yet to see that.

dark poetry = <3

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god gave us hands for a reason, to do what he did, create. that is how he created us in his image. we are the only species that creates just for the sake of creating, hence why we have art.

nú, scolde ic benugan se péo? ic gesceátaþ
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I was first introduced to the this particular structure in Senior English class in high school and I'm told it is one of the more difficult styles to right in.

Though recently I learned that the meter does not have to be 10, but it does have to be consistent throughout.

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"I'm against the self-righteous hateful agendas of mankind." - ~Mavyrk

"So the cause of death was the letter S?" Gil Grissom

"Don't judge a book by its movie." - ~CindarellaPop
:icononemanmafia08:
interesting, who invented it btw?

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god gave us hands for a reason, to do what he did, create. that is how he created us in his image. we are the only species that creates just for the sake of creating, hence why we have art.

nú, scolde ic benugan se péo? ic gesceátaþ
:iconvaya-kahvi:
No idea, some say the French, others Italians, but the English use it as if it were their own.

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"I'm against the self-righteous hateful agendas of mankind." - ~Mavyrk

"So the cause of death was the letter S?" Gil Grissom

"Don't judge a book by its movie." - ~CindarellaPop

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